Friday, July 12, 2013

"Staircase to Heaven"- My first Haiku!

This is my first Haiku . So please be kind :) Thanks to Ruchira Shukla  for  guiding me and for helping me with  the syllable count and better words. Half credit goes to her. Thanks again to her for explaining Haiku in detail at Write Tribe.
The prompt this week is "Kigo" - which is  a seasonal word. The season in India now is rainy and as I stay in Bangalore it's just impossible to not attempt this Haiku. The beautiful foggy mornings and  rainy evenings of Bangalore made me write the below Haiku.

The below pic is taken in Nandi Hills!



Early morning fog
Rain washed steps showing the path
Staircase to heaven


This one I dedicate to you Ruchira :)
With love
Me!

26 comments:

  1. Good one

    PhenoMenon

    http://throodalookingglass.com/lost-treasure/

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  2. I LOVED IT. Do write more Haikus Afshu.

    and Ruch is a sweetheart! <3

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  3. Fab! What were you worried about, huh? :)

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  4. Thank U Phenomenon, Preeti , Corinne, Naina and Kaajal for ur warm comments
    <3

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  5. Compliments the pic perfectly ! What a start :)

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  6. "Staircase to heaven" now I wish to go through it...:)

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  7. Very nice. And picture goes well too with the words. Such a peaceful staircase to Heaven.

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  8. Apt words for the beautiful picture!

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  9. I absolutely love this. Love the imagery and the symbolism. It was so beautifully done!

    Kathy
    http://gigglingtruckerswife.blogspot.com

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  10. @Tarang : Thanks a lot

    @Suzy : Thank you

    @Smita : thanks

    @Kathy : Thanks Kathy. loved ur haiku too :)

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  11. Good one :) and the picture is perfect for this Haiku :)

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  12. beautiful haiku! and the picture wasn't needed, beautiful imagery! Your first haiku can't be better! Keep writing! :)
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    My haiku: Together Into Unknown Waters.

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    1. @Sankar Jayanth : thanks for visiting my blog and appreciating

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  13. Wow !! beautiful loved it.

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  14. Awesome one!! Looking forward to more... :)

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  15. Beautiful attempt :) I like the idea of a staircase to heaven.

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  16. Afsan your maiden effort is fabulous!! The concept 'a staircase to heaven is unique'.

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